Cassandra Pettit, an ARCC student, died suddenly on Tuesday at the age of 19.
Pettit was attending ARCC to get her Associates of Arts Degree, with plans to transfer to University of Wisconsin-Madison. Pettit had always dreamed about being a child psychologist, and hoped to be involved with helping troubled children.
When Pettit was not doing schoolwork she spent many hours at her full-time job that she loved. She was a team leader at The Buckle, Pettit thought very highly of all her coworkers and loved the job.
Pettit was getting excited for the upcoming basketball season, and was hit by a drunk driver after purchasing season tickets to the UW Badger Men’s Basketball 09-10 season.
Open visitation will be held this Saturday at the Princeton Funeral Home, followed by the funeral Sunday afternoon at the Princeton Church.
Cassandra Pettit is survived by her parents, Jay and Pam, sister, Chelsea, Grandparents, aunts, uncles, and multiple close friends.
Grade: 8.5/10
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